Okay, so I wasn't planning on posting a snippet of THREE NINJA PIGS, but a comment on my last post got me thinking...
Suzanne from Tales of Extraordinary Ordinariness, wrote "I just read something that said a good revision changed or removed every, single word of the first draft."
Whoa! My OCD tendencies immediately kicked in.
Every single word! Is that possible? Have I ever done that? Have I come close? Have any of you?
I looked back at my first draft of Pigs and compared it to my most recent. (Since it is a fractured fairy take, the structure of the story really didn't change at all.)
Not going to bore you with my detailed analysis, but here is a sample to give you an idea of how much has been altered.
BEFORE (1st draft)
The wolf looked at Pig 3’s stance
And noticed the black belt on her.
“Though I’d like a good meal,
I’ve gotta be real.
Against you I’d be a goner.
AFTER (Draft submitted to my agent*)
The wolf saw that he was outrivaled
He shuddered and shivered with fear.
“Though I do love to dine
on succulent swine,
I’d best get the heck outta here!”
As you can see, the premise stayed in tact, but nearly all the actual words have changed.
* This stanza has since changed again.